10-03-2014, 03:33 AM
Thanks. Trust me, I feel them every time I read it again...
I wasn't sure about needing a period, I admittedly did terrible in any English class in high school outside of the reading areas of the class.
You're right about just needing forever, it does sound better. As well as "look at them."
"Time wins this bet" is a reference to feelings I felt long ago and had decided to shut them out, and they have returned stronger. Peeling my resistance.
This is very personal to me and I have never shared what I've written.
Thank you for the critique.
I wasn't sure about needing a period, I admittedly did terrible in any English class in high school outside of the reading areas of the class.
You're right about just needing forever, it does sound better. As well as "look at them."
"Time wins this bet" is a reference to feelings I felt long ago and had decided to shut them out, and they have returned stronger. Peeling my resistance.
This is very personal to me and I have never shared what I've written.
Thank you for the critique.