10-02-2014, 12:53 AM
(10-01-2014, 02:51 PM)Mwaba don Wrote: Afflicting that one finds oneself to exist"Humility" is a tough nut. You are certainly at liberty to write a poem about it and you may indeed know something about it but there is not a single picture here that shows me what you are saying. "Owner of a Lonely Heart" by Yes tells it much better. Find it on youtube. Listen to it. It will help you to articulate.
after great loss or great accomplishment
at the same state of actuality
as if all originates from the same state of being, Humility!
Enlightening, that in search for wholeness
a lowly heart lies not at an aisle’s close
but like clothing one don’s when in esteemed need
especially in the midst of those higher than oneself.
Puzzling that, such a gift of being,
poses as a veil for all who
present themselves in goodness
purposely only to make them vulnerable.
It may be an act for the rich,
it may be a solace for the poor,
it may be a jewel for the noble
but in all graces a holder of esteems.
Dispiriting to those who know not
like an unknown Jewel it may lay forgotten
yet it lies open in actuality, worse even
it May be used as a mask to deceive the destitute.
But then,
a lowly heart will be a lonely heart
if it joys not.
Likewise,
a lowly heart will be a depressed heart
if prided not.
That one would suppress one self’s joy
in fear that he or she be judged phony
that one would lose one’s self sincerity
in fear that he or she be judged gloomy.
Certainly, a lowly heart through it all
a source of ones joy.
all in all a lowly heart through it all
a bearer of all life’s Troubles.
If you are writing from English as Second Language viewpoint, take some time to edit. Everyone deserves a break. If you are not, a big shame on you. Grammatically, the poem is a killer and it hurts my eyes.

