The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It

The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It

vrryan
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09-30-2014, 08:12 PM

Hey, you've got nice symbolism on your poem. You could'v make the Title shorter and understandable so the readers' won't be reading a long boring title. Your 'now's are redundant. I think your "5:30 in the evening" isn't really that important, and after the reed is a ";" and you are still using "and" on the next line.
I'm not a good critique so I'm very sorry if I had a mistake on giving crits.

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The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by rowens - 09-30-2014, 04:27 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by vrryan - 09-30-2014, 08:12 PM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by maximumjake - 10-01-2014, 04:46 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by rowens - 10-01-2014, 03:46 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by rowens - 10-01-2014, 04:48 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by maximumjake - 10-01-2014, 04:53 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by rowens - 10-01-2014, 04:56 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by maximumjake - 10-01-2014, 05:08 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by l'anonymous faux - 10-01-2014, 06:11 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by maximumjake - 10-01-2014, 06:22 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by l'anonymous faux - 10-01-2014, 06:48 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by maximumjake - 10-01-2014, 08:24 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by Erthona - 10-01-2014, 09:41 AM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by rowens - 10-01-2014, 09:43 PM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by vrryan - 10-02-2014, 09:56 PM

RE: The Radio Says It's the End of the World But Only As We Know It - by rowens - 10-02-2014, 10:43 PM

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