Inside the mind of a puppy (My first poem)

[RichPy]

Hi all.

I recently took a creative writing course and decided that I enjoy writing poetry. Here is one of my first ones that was inspired by my new puppy and I hope it doesn't completely suck. After reading through a bunch of the posts in here I see I have lots to learn. Thanks for reading!

Inside the mind of a puppy

I see you there ball, mocking me, calling
I take up the chase eyes locked on the prize
You fly through the air gently, now falling
How lucky you are, soaring through the skies

You bounce and roll trying to make a break
But I see you, have you locked in my sights
You flail around not sure which path to take This line distracted me a bit because I'm not sure if you are talking about the ball flailing around, which doesn't really fit what a ball would do (bounce or roll maybe), or did you mean to write
I flail , meaning the dog doesn't know where to go. That action would seem appropriate for a dog trying to follow the ball. Although flail may not fit the dog either.
A few steps and my jaws will hold you tight.

You roll to a stop accepting your fate
I am close enough now to smell your fear
I pounce fast for I can no longer wait
The object of my hunt so very near

Victory! In my mouth my prey sits firm
Head high, my prize held up for all to see
The quest now over my heart starts to yearn
The thrill of the chase washes over me The thrill of the chase had already washed over the dog from the beginning. If he's yearning, it would seemed to have passed. The thrill is gone now, so maybe change this to something that implies that it's now over.

I will deliver you to my master
He will pick you up and throw you again
With every breath my heart beats faster
With a bark I cry, let the hunt begin!

I'm new to this forum and new to poetry, so I could be completely off base, but these are just a couple of things that jumped out at me. I'm okay with whole idea of looking at the chase from the dogs perspective, and as I read it, could picture a puppy happily jumping around as you described.