Love is Work

[2fargone]

i dont know y u used all the commas right after each line, i think that defeats the purpus of a poem. Each line or stanza shouldnt be read like a sentence, but as its own thought. Now some really good poets can use commas and periods and semicolins very well, but there is a time and place for them, and after every line it neither the right time or place. It was a very well thought poem and is a very deep and thought provoking poem to compare love to work and vise versa.