09-24-2014, 08:57 PM
It's quite graphic and the almost staccato tempo seems to help with the sense of flight fight response in the observer.
The only thing I can say about that is that maybe if it had an ebb and flow it could further show the staggered breathing and rushing thoughts of the witness, but it is still good.
Aside from these two main points I liked that it is not overly saturated with details, again this lends to the theme of a traumatic event.
The only thing I can say about that is that maybe if it had an ebb and flow it could further show the staggered breathing and rushing thoughts of the witness, but it is still good.
Aside from these two main points I liked that it is not overly saturated with details, again this lends to the theme of a traumatic event.
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Please forgive my spelling and punctuation
Please forgive my spelling and punctuation