The Bumper Sticker

[billy]

the meter isn't too bad and the poem gets across the crazy in the guy and the last line sort of lets us know why. the meter in the last two lines might want looking at as they're short (unless you meant it to be that way) it does read well but it also feels a bit wordy. specially the 2nd whose 1st line has 6 three letter words

not a bad effort, but can be improved upon with a bit more diligence.

Our neighbor, Jeff, is sitting out,
while drizzle falls, he leans and stares is a comma needed?
as water gurgles down the spout
beside the window I look though.

The man has sat there now for years,
not more than fifty feet away.
But still, my mother has her fears…
he talks and laughs up to the sky.

He brings his two pet snakes outside,
and lets them slither on a branch
he found on Assateague and tied i have no idea what Assateague is, will google it later/ so it's the island of Assateague.
up in the roof over his porch. in on or under the roof? how would you see it if it was (in) the roof?

When it stops raining, I’m sure he’ll, would [he'll] work better on the next line.?
be working on his Cherokee,
which wears a crackling, but still
there, “Veteran” bumper sticker.