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Elephant Song
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09-10-2014, 09:45 AM
Love it! I like how your rhyming doesn't sound cliche, but it still makes it flow nicely. The only thing I would suggest would be to change went (third line down) to gone because it sounds a little strange, except then it doesn't rhyme with tent... so I'm not sure what to do about that one.
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Elephant Song - by trueenigma - 09-10-2014, 09:17 AM
RE: Elephant Song - by faithlovedance22 - 09-10-2014, 09:45 AM
RE: Elephant Song - by trueenigma - 09-10-2014, 10:13 AM
RE: Elephant Song - by ellajam - 09-11-2014, 10:01 PM
RE: Elephant Song - by Pyxx - 09-13-2014, 12:26 PM
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