(09-09-2014, 10:10 AM)an_unread_rose Wrote: I don't know if you have ever listened to Wovenwar, but they are one of my favorite bands, this reminded me a lot of their song Tempest. Its my favorite one on the CD, so you can say I liked this one a lot. Check out that band if you haven't.Hello an_unread_rose, I've noticed your first few critiques. You've got to do more than this for these to be considered adequate (especially in the Serious Workshop forum). There needs to be more interaction with the poem that shows you have read it and have an opinion (which you share) on what works and what doesn't. When the critique could be written even if you hadn't read the poem it is simply not enough.
Please put in more effort and try again.
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The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson