09-06-2014, 10:07 PM
zahrakh,
Periods, what do you have against periods. "Disorienting" as Makshift said. One of course can throw periods/sentence structure (which are there for clarity) to the wind if one has a good rationale, but I don't see that here. Filled with overused phrases, There are a fair amount, not the least of which is the title. Love poetry is always problematic. I would suggest writing sentence. Most people think that the best time to write love poetry is when in love it isn't would write more and be more specific but I must away for bed a concrete pillow to rest and rest my head
Dale
Periods, what do you have against periods. "Disorienting" as Makshift said. One of course can throw periods/sentence structure (which are there for clarity) to the wind if one has a good rationale, but I don't see that here. Filled with overused phrases, There are a fair amount, not the least of which is the title. Love poetry is always problematic. I would suggest writing sentence. Most people think that the best time to write love poetry is when in love it isn't would write more and be more specific but I must away for bed a concrete pillow to rest and rest my head
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.