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The barn's on fire

The barn's on fire
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#7
09-03-2014, 07:23 PM
I really like the edit Keith. It's more cohesive now, and the story is much clearer. Two little things:

-You forgot an apostrophe in your titles (The barn's...)
-Not sure you need "sad" in L5
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Messages In This Thread
The barn's on fire - by Keith - 08-31-2014, 01:27 AM
RE: Too old to be rescued - by Tiger the Lion - 08-31-2014, 02:28 AM
RE: Too old to be rescued - by Keith - 09-02-2014, 08:18 AM
RE: Too old to be rescued - by justcloudy - 09-02-2014, 06:04 PM
RE: The barns on fire - by Keith - 09-03-2014, 08:08 AM
RE: Too old to be rescued - by billy - 09-02-2014, 06:59 PM
RE: The barns on fire - by justcloudy - 09-03-2014, 07:23 PM
RE: The barn's on fire - by Keith - 09-03-2014, 07:33 PM
RE: The barn's on fire - by cidermaid - 09-09-2014, 05:01 PM
RE: The barn's on fire - by billy - 09-09-2014, 06:16 PM
RE: The barn's on fire - by Keith - 09-13-2014, 07:27 PM
RE: The barn's on fire - by tectak - 09-09-2014, 06:49 PM
RE: The barn's on fire - by Keith - 09-13-2014, 07:25 PM



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