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First Haiku
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09-03-2014, 08:38 AM
The last line is fabulous. A warm and lovely piece. billy's suggestions for stripping it down to its barest elements are good, if you really want to make this a haiku. As it stands, however, you could just remove the haiku label and call it a short poem, which it's a fine example of
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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First Haiku - by alatos - 08-31-2014, 10:50 PM
RE: First Haiku - by danny_ - 09-02-2014, 11:53 AM
RE: First Haiku - by Tamara - 09-02-2014, 12:34 PM
RE: First Haiku - by billy - 09-02-2014, 10:50 PM
RE: First Haiku - by Magpie - 09-03-2014, 01:35 AM
RE: First Haiku - by alatos - 09-03-2014, 08:30 AM
RE: First Haiku - by Magpie - 09-03-2014, 09:10 AM
RE: First Haiku - by heslopian - 09-03-2014, 08:38 AM
RE: First Haiku - by ThisGuy1 - 09-03-2014, 11:27 PM
RE: First Haiku - by tectak - 09-04-2014, 08:41 AM
RE: First Haiku - by danny_ - 09-04-2014, 05:20 AM
RE: First Haiku - by Gaslampfantasy - 09-04-2014, 09:52 PM
RE: First Haiku - by danny_ - 09-04-2014, 10:39 PM
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