09-03-2014, 12:47 AM
I'm not sure why it's a "hate sonnet".
I'm not sure what "a patient who alive
lives only as a hostel for disease" means. Maybe someone who's death is imminent and who's existence is only a burden to others?
The meter on the last line is off. Maybe something like "how short the time 'till you are eaten too".
I really like starting the volta with a question. I've never seen that.
I'm not sure what "a patient who alive
lives only as a hostel for disease" means. Maybe someone who's death is imminent and who's existence is only a burden to others?
The meter on the last line is off. Maybe something like "how short the time 'till you are eaten too".
I really like starting the volta with a question. I've never seen that.
My name is Ozymandias, King of Kings:
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!