First Haiku
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(08-31-2014, 10:50 PM)alatos Wrote:  We stood in the door. in the door or in the doorway?
With snow falling, I asked you...
two moonlit smiles.
be as succinct as you can get away with;

snow falling at the door
i ask you
two moonlit smiles

try and make it a snapshot of the now. (just suggestions)
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First Haiku - by alatos - 08-31-2014, 10:50 PM
RE: First Haiku - by danny_ - 09-02-2014, 11:53 AM
RE: First Haiku - by Tamara - 09-02-2014, 12:34 PM
RE: First Haiku - by billy - 09-02-2014, 10:50 PM
RE: First Haiku - by Magpie - 09-03-2014, 01:35 AM
RE: First Haiku - by alatos - 09-03-2014, 08:30 AM
RE: First Haiku - by Magpie - 09-03-2014, 09:10 AM
RE: First Haiku - by heslopian - 09-03-2014, 08:38 AM
RE: First Haiku - by ThisGuy1 - 09-03-2014, 11:27 PM
RE: First Haiku - by tectak - 09-04-2014, 08:41 AM
RE: First Haiku - by danny_ - 09-04-2014, 05:20 AM
RE: First Haiku - by Gaslampfantasy - 09-04-2014, 09:52 PM
RE: First Haiku - by danny_ - 09-04-2014, 10:39 PM



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