shedding-- edit 1

[billy]

dreams can be so fickle. this works on a couple of levels, the dreaming and the groggy getting up for the piss. i like the 2nd stanza but feel it could be better laid out. yo have some specifics in there and it's just enough to get the the trying to recall part of the poem across i love the french word in the first line.

thanks for the read, after reading it a couple of times i liked it more.

Unforgiving moments of oublie i had to google and was rewarded. i shall keep the word for later use.
rip corners off my sense of self.

Chalk in hand, I remember students would [student] work better on the next line ; [for pigtails] on the one below where it is ?
can play teacher, so feel for pigtails,
not recalling when I switched
hard plastic for plush.

At night I stagger up with bladder bursting,
my dissipating dream more familiar
than the hallway hung with my paintings. good capture of being semi lucid after waking

I don’t register the other body sprawled on my bed.

Tap rushes to clean in vain, as the mirror eyes me. tap rushes feels a bit forced to me, i'd go with {the tap ru....)
Water drips from her forehead, like mine.
But she looks more composed at 3am
than I feel on the best of days.

I rush to reenter dreamland
where reality agrees with me. i think most have done , sadly i never get back into the same dream