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Bug Food (a hate sonnet)
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09-02-2014, 02:38 AM
The comparisons in this throw me completely off. I get the basic idea but I had to read sections multiple times to understand the direction. I don't see where the beginning of L3 "still hang" is needed and could be removed. For example: but like a patient who is still alive. Hope this helps.
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Bug Food (a hate sonnet) - by alatos - 09-01-2014, 10:30 PM
RE: Bug Food (a hate sonnet) - by PHTj - 09-02-2014, 02:38 AM
RE: Bug Food (a hate sonnet) - by ThePinsir - 09-03-2014, 12:47 AM
RE: Bug Food (a hate sonnet) - by alatos - 09-12-2014, 10:42 PM
RE: Bug Food (a hate sonnet) - by Pyxx - 09-13-2014, 08:54 AM
RE: Bug Food (a hate sonnet) - by just mercedes - 09-14-2014, 04:45 AM
RE: Bug Food (a hate sonnet) - by Mwaba don - 09-19-2014, 07:37 AM
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