"Silent Gift"

[danny_]

on second look i meant to say not sure about use of the word "uncoiled", i see it's a revelation being uncoiled, not silence being uncoiled. it's just that word itself i'm not sure about. as a suggestion maybe you would rethink that whole line and not say "silence" either because it's only silence on his part, not hers, right? i'm guessing that in being quiet the father started to really see hope or progress in his daughter that he didn't see before. but that could be made more clear.