08-19-2014, 11:31 PM
Hi Silver.
It kind of makes no sense to me. It feels more like a synopses of a short story than a poem. I'm not feeling any rhythm, your rhyme feels accidental, and overall it just feels kind of broken. What were you going for?
It kind of makes no sense to me. It feels more like a synopses of a short story than a poem. I'm not feeling any rhythm, your rhyme feels accidental, and overall it just feels kind of broken. What were you going for?
What is the point of living if you don't allow yourself to live?