infinitesimal (1st draft) please comment.
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Hello Jack. I think your poem is wordier than it needs to be. You could easily chop " In this peaceful moment" and go from there.
The last line might be stronger if broken into 2 lines - split after "being".
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RE: infinitesimal (1st draft) please comment. - by Tiger the Lion - 08-18-2014, 10:07 AM



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