08-16-2014, 10:50 PM
(06-17-2014, 12:19 PM)Jimmy Stark Wrote: Starving Brazilians do not pity those sporting neckties,overall i liked it and i think with a little more polishing it would be a great poem.
grumbling stomachs and hot hips cannot sympathize.
Rats stacked in ghettos drop the "in" it will emphasize the ghettos and not the rats
displaced by impenetrable stadiums in the name of Samba.
Some children learn their letters,
they earn theirs in blood.
Familial Robin Hoods stealing for survival,
more likely to have a .45 than $.45. you should write 45 dollars
Soon to peddle outside forgotten mega projects,
preying on unsuspecting glittery tourists.

