a haiku

a haiku

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08-12-2014, 08:54 AM

(08-12-2014, 08:36 AM)cjchaffin Wrote: in the garden
sunning herself
a mantis, sated

The last line woke me up, Smile

. I'm not sure you need the first line, or maybe a specific image (maybe bug-sized), or scent from the garden instead.

Thanks for the read, enjoyed it.

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a haiku - by cjchaffin - 08-12-2014, 08:36 AM

RE: a haiku - by Leanne - 08-12-2014, 08:45 AM

RE: a haiku - by cjchaffin - 08-12-2014, 08:48 AM

RE: a haiku - by Leanne - 08-12-2014, 08:50 AM

RE: a haiku - by cjchaffin - 08-12-2014, 08:56 AM

RE: a haiku - by ellajam - 08-12-2014, 08:54 AM

RE: a haiku - by cjchaffin - 08-13-2014, 12:55 AM

RE: a haiku - by John Galt - 08-13-2014, 04:59 AM

RE: a haiku - by cjchaffin - 08-13-2014, 06:05 AM

RE: a haiku - by Keith - 08-13-2014, 06:51 AM

RE: a haiku - by cjchaffin - 08-13-2014, 12:31 PM

RE: a haiku - by newsclippings - 08-13-2014, 12:34 PM

RE: a haiku - by cjchaffin - 08-13-2014, 12:39 PM

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