08-09-2014, 09:10 AM
L6 an ice-melt.
This one has blown me away, it evokes those days when we value every word, spoken or not, each moment shared precious in whatever capacity we can carry it off.
The narrator being the visitor but the one missing words at the end was a beautiful turn. The rhyme is something for me to aspire to, I only saw them when I looked for them.
For me this is a real standout. L2 keeps seeming long to me, but it's only been a few reads. Thanks for posting this. A heartbreaking pleasure.
This one has blown me away, it evokes those days when we value every word, spoken or not, each moment shared precious in whatever capacity we can carry it off.
The narrator being the visitor but the one missing words at the end was a beautiful turn. The rhyme is something for me to aspire to, I only saw them when I looked for them.
For me this is a real standout. L2 keeps seeming long to me, but it's only been a few reads. Thanks for posting this. A heartbreaking pleasure.
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