Right Now I'm Wondering...
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(08-04-2014, 03:55 AM)Smudge173 Wrote:  "Right now I’m wondering, where are you now?
Are we in the same country, or does fate not allow?
Are we thousands of miles apart, or just round the corner?
All I’m sure of at this time, is that love has no border.
What are you doing now? Are you asleep or awake
The more I think about you, the more my heart begins to ache.
Is your mind free like a bird, with wind gushing through your wings
Or are you sat alone just like me, pondering the same things?
Do we have common interests? How about pastimes
Your enjoyment and happiness, will translate into mine.
Are we two peas in a pod, or just like white and black
Because I’ve heard once or twice, that opposites attract.
I’m putting together who you are, but I’m missing a few pieces
Name, face, where you live, and especially your best features.

Right now I’m wondering, when will we ever meet?
Are you a good friend of mine, or a stranger from the street?"

Thanks for reading. I would appreciate any feedback.
I think that you could do a bit of formatting to make this flow a little bit better as a poem. for example spit of the first lines

Right now I'm wondering
where are you now
Are we in the same country,
or does fate not allow?

You might want to split this poem up into smaller stanzas as well. I liked this poem overall though it reminds me of too many youthful relationships I had with military brats who always seemed to move away. Anyways thanks for the post!
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Bunx
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Right Now I'm Wondering... - by Smudge173 - 08-04-2014, 03:55 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by SomeRandom - 08-04-2014, 02:05 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by Smudge173 - 08-05-2014, 03:15 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by Bunx - 08-07-2014, 07:56 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by bena - 08-11-2014, 05:19 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by billy - 08-11-2014, 06:39 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by bena - 08-11-2014, 10:27 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by billy - 08-11-2014, 11:07 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by bena - 08-12-2014, 01:51 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by alatos - 08-12-2014, 12:18 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by Random Phoenix - 08-15-2014, 09:28 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by UberWilhelm - 08-19-2014, 10:35 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by VisualPoet703 - 09-01-2014, 06:29 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by zahrakh - 09-01-2014, 11:40 PM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by ThePinsir - 09-03-2014, 12:54 AM
RE: Right Now I'm Wondering... - by Mwaba don - 09-11-2014, 07:44 AM



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