07-24-2014, 11:19 PM
i wouldn't change a thing, apart from your shrink 
i really enjoyed it. it just works (for me) the title plays a major role in the poem as it should in a poem of this size.
well worth the read
i really enjoyed it. it just works (for me) the title plays a major role in the poem as it should in a poem of this size.well worth the read