Fear of Falling edit0.1billy, ella
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while it doesn't read bad tom, i honestly couldn't get into it and without the epilogue i wouldn't have guessed what it was about or who.
i thing kerchief if use as a metaphor for the plane etc doesn't jive (if that's what the hanky represented). wish i could be more in depth with my feedback.
thanks for the read.
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Fear of Falling edit0.1billy, ella - by tectak - 07-24-2014, 09:39 PM
RE: Fear of Falling - by billy - 07-24-2014, 10:54 PM
RE: Fear of Falling - by tectak - 07-24-2014, 11:17 PM
RE: Fear of Falling - by ellajam - 07-24-2014, 11:25 PM
RE: Fear of Falling - by billy - 07-24-2014, 11:30 PM
RE: Fear of Falling - by tectak - 07-25-2014, 02:37 AM



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