07-10-2014, 07:20 AM
TE your allowed to comment on my poems anywhere, and I would appreciate if you did. I'm nit sure why you thought you weren't.
Thanks,
Dale
loocerie,
The meaning behind it is fairly simple. The reader is suppose to assume that what is being described is about humans, until they get to the punch line and find out it was about turtles. Nothing deep or special here, just a little poem joke. I guess you would call it misdirection.
Kinda like the joke: "She opens for him, tentatively as it is her first time. He immediately begins to drill her, she moans..in pain and fear, not realizing it would hurt this much. Plus all the blood, it made her sick. She never understood how this would be. It was her first visit to the dentist."
Not a great retelling but you get the idea.
Dale
NC, thanks for the comment,
Do you mean fussy because of the enjambment/ambiguity? My idea was that it would help keep a person occupied until they hit the punch line. Or are you meaning something else?
Dale
Thanks,
Dale
loocerie,
The meaning behind it is fairly simple. The reader is suppose to assume that what is being described is about humans, until they get to the punch line and find out it was about turtles. Nothing deep or special here, just a little poem joke. I guess you would call it misdirection.
Kinda like the joke: "She opens for him, tentatively as it is her first time. He immediately begins to drill her, she moans..in pain and fear, not realizing it would hurt this much. Plus all the blood, it made her sick. She never understood how this would be. It was her first visit to the dentist."
Not a great retelling but you get the idea.
Dale
NC, thanks for the comment,
Do you mean fussy because of the enjambment/ambiguity? My idea was that it would help keep a person occupied until they hit the punch line. Or are you meaning something else?
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.