07-09-2014, 07:44 AM
I think I can if Foggleness isn't around. Stop telling us, and show us instead:
Many prepositions: There is a lamp along the side walk on the street where I live the amongst the poor.
Showing, less prepositions and more action:
The street light shines
on empty pavement.
Poverty means < threw that play on words in there for ya >
trudging alone
when even the brightest illumination
can't bring hope.
Not perfect but off the top of the head. Good luck!
Many prepositions: There is a lamp along the side walk on the street where I live the amongst the poor.
Showing, less prepositions and more action:
The street light shines
on empty pavement.
Poverty means < threw that play on words in there for ya >
trudging alone
when even the brightest illumination
can't bring hope.
Not perfect but off the top of the head. Good luck!