dead antennas wave goodbye edit .01-Paul

[Brownlie]

dead antennas wave goodbye

Cockroach in the bath,
cockroach in the hall, -- Maybe avoid the repetition to add more interesting language.
see the different ways
they fall. -- What are the different ways you mention

Embalmed with pesticide,
on chitin covered sides,
—not a pest
in their own eyes—.
Still they fall,
in the bath or in the hall,
it matters not what they decide;
dead antennas wave goodbye.


–Erthona


©2014

I think you might be able to list some more ways they fall. I like the word chitin, and the cockroach being embalmed in pesticide as I think that would look like a white spray. You and your eternal war with bugs.