So Boldly We'll Go

[ellajam]

Hi, SM, Welcome.

I'm no expert on forms but I have been trying to learn to work with refrains. For me the interest lies in turning the refrain into alternative meanings, to join them with the lines above and below to give different meanings to the same words.

If you'd like you can check the Poetry Practice threads here and read what some posters have done with refrains. It's quite a challenge.

I've never really tried my hand at poetry before, this is a first for me. I read through a bunch of poetic forms, picked one and tried to do something similar. I admit, embarrassing as it is, that I don't even recall at this point which form it was that I was trying to stay within, but I remember that I didn't succeed in staying within it very well. You'll notice that many of the lines are modifications of the lines that came before. This can be seen as lazy, I'm sure, but it was something that I wanted to focus on. Feedback is appreciated, and thank you for your time in advance.

hearts full of fire and heads filled with tales
into the world we so boldly will go
odds are against us but we shall prevail

hearts spilling fire and headstrong with tales
into the world we so boldly will go
together forever we cannot fail

tides crash against us yet we shall prevail
into the world we so boldly will go
adventure invites a wind in our sails

hands held so tightly that we cannot fail
into the world we so boldly will go
we'll outrun the roads and cut a new trail

peril compels we not slacken our sails
into the world we so boldly will go
time will not count us in his balanced scales

we'll run out of roads but forge a new trail
into the world we so boldly will go
us cutters of curtains, parters of veils

time will play tyrant but we will not quell this doesn't make sense to me.
into the world we so boldly will go
i'll stand beside you through any travail

no matter the world so boldly we'll go