Bring it down
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The first two lines of the second stanza sound the best but don't have much to do with anything else in the poem. The rhymes are forced, the second and last lines of each stanza especially. They don't say anything that needs to be said, if you take them out and add something more thoughtful, whether it rhymes or not, the poem could be better.
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Bring it down - by stajas - 06-27-2014, 12:44 AM
RE: Bring it down - by rowens - 06-27-2014, 01:47 AM
RE: Bring it down - by stajas - 06-27-2014, 02:51 AM
RE: Bring it down - by rowens - 06-27-2014, 02:58 AM
RE: Bring it down - by billy - 06-27-2014, 11:22 AM
RE: Bring it down - by BJ_Murphy - 07-01-2014, 11:25 AM
RE: Bring it down - by jbreze - 07-03-2014, 10:40 PM



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