Life is just a game
#3
This was a good poem, expressing your thoughts and problems into a nice flowing piece. The improvement that i would encourage is to stick to one central theme and idea and then expand on that.

That is a good poem written in high school, nice ending!


Messages In This Thread
Life is just a game - by Cyferz - 06-08-2014, 02:05 PM
RE: Life is just a game - by QDeathstar - 06-08-2014, 02:57 PM
RE: Life is just a game - by Lazoom - 06-14-2014, 04:50 PM
RE: Life is just a game - by billy - 06-15-2014, 10:16 AM
RE: Life is just a game - by Cyferz - 06-20-2014, 12:31 PM
RE: Life is just a game - by Lazoom - 06-09-2014, 10:20 AM
RE: Life is just a game - by Erthona - 06-09-2014, 12:58 PM
RE: Life is just a game - by TomSommerville - 06-16-2014, 04:27 AM
RE: Life is just a game - by LeoEvans - 06-23-2014, 10:10 PM



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