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[Truerenigma]

I enjoy this very much. there is one little suggestion I would like to offer:

when finally
I had it.

There is some ambiguity here that seems unintended; the question is whether he finally had what he was looking for, or the colloquial fed up, etc.

To clear it up and gain some impact and significance from such a small group of two short lines, I would suggest the following:

"I'd had it." for the one -or- "I had it:" for the other.

Thanks for posting.