Ichabod's Waltz

[kmatrixg]

First post - here's a piece I'm satisfied with.

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Two souls begin dancing,
Long everlasting,
With envious, masterful skill

The bodies of each
Make not such a peep
As they loiter on, quiet and still

But inside the mind
There’s no worry of time,
As shadows move swift and with thrill

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Hi Kmatrx: This is pleasant sounding; but some questions: you are referring to dead persons as souls? V1 and shadows V2. If they are "dancing long everlasting", and V3 "shadows move swift"; how can they be still (unless you mean quiet). My biggest question is in the sense you are using "soul" and "shadow". Aren't you speaking of ghosts? Best, Loretta

I left it vague purposely, so that you or any other reader could convey personal ideas into the vessel without being restricted too much by the language used.

However, my visualization of this scene is as follows:

A dark setting, no features other than two misty white figures sort of twirling around each other. When writing, I imagined the idea of soul searching and finding a soul mate - and that beyond death, the two souls would still dance with one another.

Personally, I believe the soul expands through several layers of life - it fuels our body, it inspires our mind, and it IS our intuition. So really, I attempted to deliver all three of those in this piece.

Verse 1: the conjoining of soul-mates
Verse 2: The ascension from the physical realm
Verse 3: Extending from Verse 2, the residual beings of the physical realm.

Hope that makes sense!