06-06-2014, 05:18 AM
(06-02-2014, 09:51 PM)Jimmy Stark Wrote: I am a complex Adonis. you say here you are complex, yet an archetype in the next line?
Archetypical physical.
Saddled by ocular paparazzi
on my runway mirror.
Candles burn in unlit rooms how is the room unlit if candles burn there?
while clarity is exiled. Coroners corners corner me
as hunger emerges.
My stomach burns through restless nights.
Weight forever on my shoulders.
I am a complex Adonis
interesting theme, yet you could go further with this. of course it all depends on your intent and the depth of your investment in the subject.

