Adonis

[LorettaYoung]

I am a complex Adonis. you think you are a god? Also, I think complex Adonis is awkward and redundant
Archetypical physical.
Saddled by ocular paparazzi
on my runway mirror.
Candles burn in unlit rooms but the rooms are lit by candles?
while clarity is exiled. Coroners corners corner me
as hunger emerges hunger emerges and stomach burns are boring, IMO
My stomach burns through restless nights.
Weight forever on my shoulders.
I am a complex Adonis

I liked the lines "weight forever on my shoulders" and "saddled by ocular paparazzi"

But...

The poem is kinda boring, your a starving model. Ok?

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Hi, I cannot see the connection between the first four lines and the rest. The quickly changing line length makes the reading choppy. I think it would help to bring the ideas closer and more understandable. Best, Loretta