Cotton Candy Sheep

[Pyxx]

That's just something to look at. What words are needed, which aren't, which sound better, which might sound better. The different things to try.

I made them bold, that's all I know.

I thought those words in my poem were coming across as bold in my post, my mistake. What you meant was to remove the words in bold. I misinterpreted this ^_^ Thanks for the advice. I have removed the words in bold and I think It sounds much better now.