06-04-2014, 08:37 AM
Thank you for responding, but the poem is too full of full-blown hypocrisy for me to enjoy....
I found myself hating the speaker, no offense. (And nothing personal)
Also, if the person is high, you should let the reader know prior to the last line. You describe being physically high, but its a long leap for a person to make that the speaker is mentally high, especially when he talks like he hates people and life.
I found myself hating the speaker, no offense. (And nothing personal)
Also, if the person is high, you should let the reader know prior to the last line. You describe being physically high, but its a long leap for a person to make that the speaker is mentally high, especially when he talks like he hates people and life.