06-04-2014, 01:59 AM
It has some rough areas. Even if you cleaned them up, it would still be a typical street poet poem. The people that read in front of open mikes all over the country and sound the same.
If you slowed down with the rhymes and other effects and worked out something original, or at least more original ways to say things, it would probably come out better.
If you slowed down with the rhymes and other effects and worked out something original, or at least more original ways to say things, it would probably come out better.