Female Exploitation…a tale for today(edit 0.00002, blake,brownlie)

[tectak]

This was a good poem, but on this line:

I just get bored, so up the anti.

You probably meant to go with the word "ante"

Bloody good catch! Hoist on my own petard.
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tectak

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I like this. It tells the tale of a feminist cam girl correct? Or is it just a woman who gets a lot of unsolicited explicit texts and videos?

Each stanza talks about a different way in which men try to exploit women and the misconceptions many men openly express. I think that's pretty cool. I like the frank language and how you don't try to pull any punches. The subject matters you are talking about are quite explicit, so I think it is perfect that the narrator is extremely blunt.

There were only a few things I thought could be changed. The Red Ferrari is referring to a vagina, which Prince has already very famously done. It works alright since you talk about a Porsche, but it could probably be made stronger with another metaphor. I also would reconsider the final line, after viewing the film Teeth the thought of vagina dentata makes me want to crawl into a hole and hide in fear.

Just my opinions on the changes. I really liked what you wrote. Keep it up!

Correct, Jimmy.
My ignorance of Prince's allusions is complete...the red Ferrari meant a red Ferrari
She's an uncomplicated girl!
Best,
tectak

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No thanks, I prefer mine without the teeth!

Bide your time,Chris.Sans eyes, sans teeth...
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tectak