Cavelight

[just mercedes]

This has the bones of a good poem - although, I was warned never to use the word "suddenly" in a poem, but can't remember why not. I think you have too many gerunds - 'ing' words - and maybe too many adjectives as well. Try to find the exact word rather than qualifying some that are close. I also liked the concrete images, not so much the abstracts such as 'doubt' and 'hurt', but overall strong imagery.

Thanks for posting this - I'll have another look when you revise.