Cavelight

[ellajam]

Hi, Tiger, I need more time with this but I just wanted to say how much I like this:

Suddenly hope,
trucking in like Bigfoot,
muddying our floors, brash and uninvited,
where we don't usually entertain fabled notions (I think I'd prefer fables to fabled notions.)
at the same bar where loss comes to drink.


I'll be back.

I think there is something here but it needs an overhaul. I hope it is an enjoyable read as is, but I'm very open to direction as I feel it's a little self-indulgent. Thanks.

Cavelight

Suddenly light,
through an impossible crack,
narrowly dissecting incumbent shadows
and igniting paradigms
with laser concentration.

Suddenly hope,
trucking in like Bigfoot,
muddying our floors, brash and uninvited,
where we don't usually entertain fabled notions
at the same bar where loss comes to drink.

Suddenly song,
above monotonous doubt and the static of hurt;
above tomorrow’s mumbling voices
and yesterday’s rumbling clouds,
clapping thunder for another encore

Suddenly choice,
where decisions were decidedly made
by enduring ghosts, now frustrated and grey,
now exhausted and suddenly spooked
by light and hope and song

Or suddenly dark,
and we won't be asked again to refract colour
or listen for echoes in painted caves.
We won't be asked again to stream through an impossible crack
to dissect any of it.