05-29-2014, 12:26 PM
Thank you Q. The last two lines are meant to be non-verbal communication which is why "I love you" and "Okay" are not in quotations. I was hoping the word "whispered" might suggest this, plus remove the possible cliche element.
Asahi loosely refers to "Morning Sun" in Japanese and is also a brand of beer.
I was aware this piece might be a little too close to me and therefore overly cryptic. Thanks for reading, commenting and googling.
Asahi loosely refers to "Morning Sun" in Japanese and is also a brand of beer.
I was aware this piece might be a little too close to me and therefore overly cryptic. Thanks for reading, commenting and googling.