05-29-2014, 06:15 AM
this has nothing to do with the eternal return. But i would suggest reading Klossowski's the vicious circle. great book.
on the poem. it is all cliche and silly 'thus spake...' references [thous and such, fear and trembling (i mean literally spelled out, without any sense of irony)]. If you want to write a stream of consciousness poem, you really have to be very strict and every word and layer contemplated and considered. This has none of that. It is just too randomly common, as if you have fallen down a hole of thought, and random thought is the most boring and tediously mundane thought of all; because, it is lazy, evidenced in the cliches with the odd 'i smelled a what's all this then fly me... roses are red' in the middle of it all.
If you are going to write a poem referencing the eternal return then make it worth it, make it make Nietzsche think, not bored; or else just post a link to Nietzsche, because this poem neither brings anything new or better to the conversation, either poetically or philosophically.
on the poem. it is all cliche and silly 'thus spake...' references [thous and such, fear and trembling (i mean literally spelled out, without any sense of irony)]. If you want to write a stream of consciousness poem, you really have to be very strict and every word and layer contemplated and considered. This has none of that. It is just too randomly common, as if you have fallen down a hole of thought, and random thought is the most boring and tediously mundane thought of all; because, it is lazy, evidenced in the cliches with the odd 'i smelled a what's all this then fly me... roses are red' in the middle of it all.
If you are going to write a poem referencing the eternal return then make it worth it, make it make Nietzsche think, not bored; or else just post a link to Nietzsche, because this poem neither brings anything new or better to the conversation, either poetically or philosophically.