Eternal Recurrence

[laffitaffi]

One of my recent ones. Any critique is welcome.

I wander to distant lands
to find my soul
from down below.This is cliche and boring. Find a more exciting way to express this. Imagery would definitely help
At times, the journey is gloom.
If only it would end

so very soon. sounds like a forced rhyme. It's cool to keep rhythm, but never sacrifice the quality of content for it (don't use words as filler). This sounds like filler.
Many times, I have trembled,
fallen to a stupor
with my head on the ground. Head on the ground? Sounds superfluous
My tears are really blood,
I'm bleeding sorrow,
I'm at the new low. Bag the angst or find a less "angsty" way to express it.

So many others are just like me, bag "just"
bleeding eternally
from their inner void. this is boring
Then there are those who numb themselves
from the hear of hell
that awaits them.
Others may just be sheep,
eyes open but asleep
throughout their lives.
Eternal Recurrence, why thou betray me?
Why thou betray us all? the random switch of dialect "thou" is inappropriate. Maybe some people can make it work (I have yet to read), but to change dialect for dramatic effect always sounds silly. Avoid it. Also, why are you speaking to the Eternal Recurrence? Also you are talking about others, and then the switch to the more intimate questioning sounds strange.
Why torture us all?

I assume you read Nietzsche. While you surely capture existential "angst", I'm not sure this poem has much to do with the Eternal Recurrence.

Try to use more creative language. Don't sacrifice content for rhyme.