05-27-2014, 08:07 AM
(05-26-2014, 02:37 PM)twisterkid34 Wrote: Erotic, but also saddening. I feel like we can all relate in some aspect to what you've written. I like the phrase "cold stone floor". It is obvious enough but also symbolic enough to get the message of loss across to the reader. Im not one for overly complicated writing and ambiguity. I think you do a good job of immediately addressing what you are writing about but in a tasteful way. Love and passion are full of such heat that I like the way fire is incorporated in. It maybe a cliche, but i like it. Its also why i like the cold stone floor part, the contrast really emphasizes the loss in the end.
Thank you twister for commenting and your appreciation; those were things I was trying to portray; but am here trying to learn to do it better. Best, Loretta