05-26-2014, 04:26 AM
A poet without words is a mime.
I think the poem needs a trim. And I don't think the third person view helps it it. First person could be more intense, since the speaker has something to gain or lose, not "he" who. I would also attempt to explain why a poet without words is a tragedy at all. If he is a poet without words perhaps he misinterpreted his life's calling. That's the real tragedy here.
A poet without words is someone sad and absurd.
Choked. Hacking letters
I think the poem needs a trim. And I don't think the third person view helps it it. First person could be more intense, since the speaker has something to gain or lose, not "he" who. I would also attempt to explain why a poet without words is a tragedy at all. If he is a poet without words perhaps he misinterpreted his life's calling. That's the real tragedy here.
A poet without words is someone sad and absurd.
Choked. Hacking letters
into
something
centered.
something
centered.

