05-20-2014, 04:35 AM
The middle stanza weighs it down. I think the second stanza both fits the poem and weighs it down. Weighs it down or blocks something.
But maybe the 2nd stanza can stay after all if you get rid of the Boom line and change the one before it to I could kill you instead of can.
But maybe the 2nd stanza can stay after all if you get rid of the Boom line and change the one before it to I could kill you instead of can.