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[ChristopherSea]

It's a delicious little extended metaphor Dale. I saw those dark clouds as your beard. I wonder if that could be illustrated for others to see. ‘Fork of lightening’ seems more natural to me. What about: ‘A bite settles the rumbling thunder below’? Do you need that ‘soon’ or can it be put after ’belt’, as it may read better either deleting or moving it. Just a couple ideas that struck me, see what you think. I am dying for a big cloud of meringue now!/Chris