05-15-2014, 06:08 AM
(05-14-2014, 08:33 AM)Leanne Wrote: I Cede You Peace
I cede you peace,
I'll keep my passion.
Let's have a feast,
we'll dress in fashion;
you are peace
(and reason too)
and me, I'm passion
through and through.
I know your heart
a golden gem.
So, surely I will laugh, and
raise up my head
(as you once said)
to make of empty peace
a new facade.
I will;
disturb the peace
in my own fashion.
I cede you peace
in search of passion
This excellent example of workshopping in the Novice thread can be found here. Thank you to Loretta for a terrific attitude towards workshopping, and to all who commented for their supportive and insightful suggestions.
Thank you so much guys; actually I stumbled on this (not good at computer), there is no finite amount of good will and the love of learning, gratitude and helpfulness that is here. You were all so helpful (and right). To me this is a small poem with a big message; which I am happy to share; as in all perspectives. Best, Loretta