05-14-2014, 08:05 PM
I hadn't really followed this one, but I like the workshopping that was done and the poem itself. Its one of the few examples that doesn't bother me with a line break on and. I think it's because the and feels like a pivot point for the content. I also like little things like the parenthetical statement. I think what makes this one work so well for me though is the tempo--great pacing.
Nice spotlight
Nice spotlight
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
